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==The first Hybrid's "children"==
==The first Hybrid's "children"==
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==Razor Acts and Teaser==
==Razor Acts and Teaser==
I've finished writing the Pegasus timeline for Razor. I know it's pretty long, but keep in mind that not only is it a double-episode, the content is extremely compressed, so it was hard to shorten it up.  For future reference, I have added an invisible note at the bottom of the Razor summary detailing the Razor Teaser, and a breakdown of where each act begins and ends.  Additionally, I am including another copy here.
I've finished writing the Pegasus timeline for Razor. I know it's pretty long, but keep in mind that not only is it a double-episode, the content is extremely compressed, so it was hard to shorten it up.  For future reference, I have added an invisible note at the bottom of the Razor summary detailing the Razor Teaser, and a breakdown of where each act begins and ends.  Additionally, I am including another copy here.
 
===Teaser===
*Teaser
*We see only Shaw’s hand as she opens and closes Cain’s knife.  She rubs her fingers along the blade, careful not to get hurt.  She talks about the importance of living with your decisions, and the cycle of life, and how there are no second chances.  The word “RAZOR” flashes across the screen.
**We see only Shaw’s hand as she opens and closes Cain’s knife.  She rubs her fingers along the blade, careful not to get hurt.  She talks about the importance of living with your decisions, and the cycle of life, and how there are no second chances.  The word “RAZOR” flashes across the screen.
*We now see a series of flashbacks, periodically edited in with shots of Shaw caressing Cain’s knife.  The first to appear is the discovery of the Pegasus by the Fleet ([[Pegasus (episode)|Pegasus]]).  We then see Gina being whipped by Thorne (a new scene), and we hear Baltar’s voice comforting her, telling her that what she needs is justice.  Next we see Gina holding the gun to Cain’s head.  We hear the gun go off, and then we immediately see her funeral, with Fisk giving the eulogy ([[Resurrection Ship, Part II]]).  Next we see Fisk being garroted and then Adama and Tigh talking about promoting Garner ([[Black Market]]).  Next we see the scene where the enemy baseships jump ahead of the Pegasus, and Garner dies saving the ship.  We see Apollo promoted to commander ([[The Captain's Hand]]).
**We now see a series of flashbacks, periodically edited in with shots of Shaw caressing Cain’s knife.  The first to appear is the discovery of the Pegasus by the Fleet ([[Pegasus (episode)|Pegasus]]).  We then see Gina being whipped by Thorne (a new scene), and we hear Baltar’s voice comforting her, telling her that what she needs is justice.  Next we see Gina holding the gun to Cain’s head.  We hear the gun go off, and then we immediately see her funeral, with Fisk giving the eulogy ([[Resurrection Ship, Part II]]).  Next we see Fisk being garroted and then Adama and Tigh talking about promoting Garner ([[Black Market]]).  Next we see the scene where the enemy baseships jump ahead of the Pegasus, and Garner dies saving the ship.  We see Apollo promoted to commander ([[The Captain's Hand]]).
*Finally we hear Shaw again, talking about how you are the choices you make in life, followed by the opening titles.
**Finally we hear Shaw again, talking about how you are the choices you make in life, followed by the opening titles.


::Don't use things like "we see". If anything write "the viewer sees". But best is a more neutral voice like "Shaw says" or "Shaw's hand". The rest isn't really needed at all. I don't think it's necessary to summarize the flashbacks designed to bring viewers up to speed. Shaw's monologue should be enough. --[[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 04:29, 26 November 2007 (CST)
:Don't use things like "we see". If anything write "the viewer sees". But best is a more neutral voice like "Shaw says" or "Shaw's hand". The rest isn't really needed at all. I don't think it's necessary to summarize the flashbacks designed to bring viewers up to speed. Shaw's monologue should be enough. --[[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 04:29, 26 November 2007 (CST)


*Act 1
 
**Begins after opening titles.
===Act 1===
**Ends after Shaw is promoted to major.
*Begins after opening titles.
*Act 2
*Ends after Shaw is promoted to major.
**Begins as Shaw is drilling Colonial Marines on rifle assembly aboard Pegasus.  
===Act 2===
**Ends as the Pegasus crew is shouting “So Say We All!”
*Begins as Shaw is drilling Colonial Marines on rifle assembly aboard Pegasus.  
*Act 3
*Ends as the Pegasus crew is shouting “So Say We All!”
**Begins as the Pegasus senior staff is discussing the communication relay.  
===Act 3===
**Ends as the first Cylon salvos strike Pegasus.
*Begins as the Pegasus senior staff is discussing the communication relay.  
*Act 4
*Ends as the first Cylon salvos strike Pegasus.
**Begins as Belzen is being taken to the morgue.  
===Act 4===
**Ends after the First Cylon War flashback, as Adama and Roslin look over the original Cylon Raider.   
*Begins as Belzen is being taken to the morgue.  
*Act 5
*Ends after the First Cylon War flashback, as Adama and Roslin look over the original Cylon Raider.   
**Begins as Roslin, Apollo and Adama discuss the Guardian basestar.  
===Act 5===
**Ends after the massacre aboard the Scylla.
*Begins as Roslin, Apollo and Adama discuss the Guardian basestar.  
*Act 6
*Ends after the massacre aboard the Scylla.
**Begins as the Scylla boarding party is leaving the ship.   
===Act 6===
**Ends as the Centurion Model 0005’s are coordinating with each other aboard the Cylon Raider.
*Begins as the Scylla boarding party is leaving the ship.   
*Act 7
*Ends as the Centurion Model 0005’s are coordinating with each other aboard the Cylon Raider.
**Begins as Red Squad is floating in space.   
===Act 7===
**Ends after the Guardian basestar explodes.   
*Begins as Red Squad is floating in space.   
*Act 8
*Ends after the Guardian basestar explodes.   
**Begins as Apollo and Adama are discussing Cain and Shaw posthumously.  
===Act 8===
**Ends at credits.
*Begins as Apollo and Adama are discussing Cain and Shaw posthumously.  
*Ends at credits.
--[[User:OrionFour|OrionFour]] 03:52, 26 November 2007 (CST)
--[[User:OrionFour|OrionFour]] 03:52, 26 November 2007 (CST)


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