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	*Has already been improved a bit, but there is more to do.		*Has already been improved a bit, but there is more to do. -- [[User:Serenity\|Serenity]] 20:31, 19 February 2008 (CST)

	===To Do===		===To Do===
	*Her relationships to [[Billy Keikeya]] and Lee Adama		*Her relationships to [[Billy Keikeya]] and Lee Adama

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[[Galen Tyrol]]

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	*Starts ~~goood~~, but then becomes increasingly plot focused. -- [[User:Serenity\|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)		*Starts good, but then becomes increasingly plot focused. I never really liked this one -- [[User:Serenity\|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
	===To Do===		===To Do===
	*Concision and revision of the later sections to make them more character oriented.		*Concision and revision of the later sections to make them more character oriented.

Serenity: A central page for comments on character articles and suggestions for improvements

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A central page for comments on character articles and suggestions for improvements

New page

Maybe this deserves an own overall page, but since it ties into this idea, it could be done as sub page. The idea is having a central page on which to comment on character articles and coordinate their improvement, similar to the TOS article project.
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== [[Lee Adama]] ==
===Comments===
*I feel that this is a template of what character articles should be. Some of the paragraphs are long, but they actually show who he is. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===

== [[William Adama]] ==
===Comments===
*This is also pretty good overall. I already changed the last section to be more character focused than usual. Note that the "Background" section has a brief summary of his character traits. That would be something to for the others as well, possibly even as its own section. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===

==[[Laura Roslin]]==
===Comments===
*Has already been improved a bit, but there is more to do.
===To Do===
*Her relationships to [[Billy Keikeya]] and Lee Adama
*Maybe some more on her sort-of-romantic relationship with William Adama. It shouldn't be overemphasized and be made more than it is though.
*Better highlight her resolve and convictions. Being determined to lead the Fleet to Earth, and hold up civilian rule and the law (which then better contrasts with the election fraud). But also her use of realpolitik and seemingly harsh decisions (treatment of Cylons, how she deals with political opponents).

==[[Kara Thrace]]==
===Comments===
*Can be improved a lot. Needs more focus on character and personality -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*A character with such a strong personality would benefit from a personality summary
*Deleting less important events and expanding some others instead.
*Highlighting her relationships to William Adama, Karl Agathon and Lee Adama

==[[Gaius Baltar]]==
===Comments===
*Uses a somewhat different format that serves to highlight his career in the fleet, but is still rather plot oriented. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*Maybe a character trait summary like with [[William Adama]]

==[[Sharon Agathon]]==
===Comments===
*Pretty good all in all. She mostly interacts with Helo, so there isn't much to elaborate there. Otherwise it focuses on her loyalty to the Colonials and Hera. The former could be highlighted even more as a defining aspect maybe. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===

==[[Caprica-Six]]==
===Comments===
*This is still very plot focused, but off the top of my head, I don't have any specific ideas for improvement -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===

==[[Galen Tyrol]]==
===Comments===
*Starts goood, but then becomes increasingly plot focused. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*Concision and revision of the later sections to make them more character oriented.

==[[Karl Agathon]]==
===Comments===
*Not bad, but also a bit plot focused at times. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*More on his idealism, which is probably his central character trait. Also a summary of his personality
*Slight concision/rewriting of some sections

==[[Saul Tigh]]==
===Comments===
*Not bad, but also rather plot focused -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*More on his personality and also his positive traits. He is a competent officer when he isn't drunk.

==[[Felix Gaeta]]==
===Comments===
*This one actually makes an attempt at character analysis, so there isn't that much to do. -- [[User:Serenity|Serenity]] 10:27, 19 February 2008 (CST)
===To Do===
*Some of the later sections could do with some more analysis or explanations for how his actions tie into his personality. For example his actions on New Caprica.

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